Really? it would make a good song? cool! i'm a song writer now... anyway, here's another poem i wrote:
The Thin Ice
As you skate on the thin ice of modern life,
you’re having a great time, the time of your life!
But when you see that,
that breaking,
that aching,
that crack in the ice,
all the love, happieness, and fun,
just falls apart.
As you fall,
you feel the scare,
the scare of the world, the real world of life!
You fall and all the hapieness, just flashes before you!
You try to grab it, but its just too far,
and you’re already, an inch,
before the the coldness of the water,
the real life.
As you touch the water,
you feel the sarrow, the pain, and you can’t even see,
the happieness, the love, and anything good!
Instead you see, darkness and frightening sights!
The freezing grasp of the water, takes over your body,
and you can’t feel anything, except the pain!
Your eyes become black,
your skin, blue,
your heart, purple,
and your mind, nothing but darkness.
The current has taken you, fully under the ice,
the ice of modern life.
The chances of coming back, are slim!
By only a chance, you have come back to the air,
take in the air, and never ignore it.
If you are out of the ice,
breath,
breath that free air.
Don’t be greedy,
just take what you got!
Or you might find yourself, under the ice,
the ice of modern life,
once again...
Its probably going to sound like a song too, because its based on a song.
EDIT: "The Thin Ice" is a song of Pink Floyds. I LOVE Pink Floyd, and i guess thats why maybe. Thank you for the comment.