JOE!

Aw .

Want to have some free for alls? maybe we can get some people.

Bad day, dentist, bloody teeth being scraped
Lag, and you were using stale moves lol. Wait,
what about Brinstar? I am a little confused.
I am sorry by the way.

And I was really mad I was doing bad, and I couldn`t do my best

He`s not naked lol.

Hmm sorry i cant im leaving for a party, but maybe tonight at like 10 ish if ur still on...

wanna do some friendlys?

hmm not much im just talking to people

...................... xD

Yeah well I guess it was okay. I'm still uber failsauce. =(
4 Mans aren't to fun for the ensuing 1v1 at the end.

And yeah alright you can Fight my Lucas (Esper) when we get the chance.

I think your Falcon is better, you got me with your kick and dsmash almost every time.

Good games.
Lol at Weegee`s mansion, was the best,
when you had to go, I saw your foot moving a little bit
and you almost got me with your falcon punch lol.

I can get on now, I`m hosting

Can you in like an hour?

JOE! want to fight soon if you can?

Haha yeah that as a gr8 match, though i lost D: haha

?? i dont recall xD

Haha idk, but yeah our matches are hilarious XD falcon pawnched the crap out of my fox 0.o haha

Well ok... I'll give you some comments on it... but just here, not in the thread. I would prefer not to receive a bunch of requests from past movesets.



Are my moveset senses tingling? Why yes, yes they are.

Necessary Details
Damage Percentages
Knockback (usually given in estimations like low, medium, good, great, etc.)
Attack Reach (how far does an attack reach? Often given in SBB's, or Stage Builder Blocks, Bodylengths, or by comparing them to another move, or perhaps just with estimations like low, medium, good, great, etc.)
Beginning Lag + Ending Lag (though some include estimated or exact times or frames, most just say something along the lines of low, medium, good, great, etc.)
Priority (if this attack collides with another attack, does it overpower the other attack, are both attacks neutralized, or does the other attack overpower this one, again, this is usually given in estimations like low, medium, good, great, etc.)
Hitstun
Flight Speed (for projectiles)
Projectile Reach (for projectiles. Most often given through SBB's, Bodylengths, or by comparing it to the distance of other projectiles or by stating how much of Final Destination the projectile would travel).
Projectile Priority (if this collides with another projectile, which one wins?)
Move Duration

BB Code + Organization
While there is a lack of color (that doesn't come from the pictures), that is hardly a problem when the organization and headers are so clear and you even have the occassional picture to make this very pleasing to the eye.

Stats
The well-above average stats on all 3 of the primary attack stats (reach, speed, and power) make me think that Spiderman may be broken. It doesn't help that he has a great recov, according to the stats, either. Nothing is considerably below-average to balance things out.

Animations
Just including these is nice for a newcomer. Including pictures is even better.

Neutral B
You forgot to include beginning lag. It is obvious that there is a lot of ending lag if he misses, but what is the ending lag if he hits. IMO, the duration the foe is caught should be reduced. 1 second for every second you applied it to them is enough, if not more than enough.

Side B
I don't really see anything wrong with this move, and I rather like the detail. I'm guessing the lags are basically almost exactly the same as Falco's laser. How far do the web shots travel and how fast do they fly?

Up B
This is really a nice move. Versatile, well detailed, and has a variety of effects. Really the only thing you need is the speed, reach, priority, and hitstun of the A attack, and the ending lag and maximum reach of the web itself.

Down B
What is the reach of the web? What is the beginning lag of the web? It is a unique move. It just needs some more details.

Normal Attacks
13% is just a bit excessive for an A,A,A combo (seeing as the average is about 6-8%). You also need to include the beginning lag, ending lag, reach, priority, hitstun, etc. of each hit in the combo. The combo is sort of generic, but atleast it isn't Punch, Punch, Kick (rather it is punch, kick, jumpkick). The Dash Attack is the same story, but it is actually quite balanced from what information you have provided.

Tilts
The F-Tilt is pretty basic but that is the only real problem with it. A nice visual effect would be to have something burst out of the foes back similar to the Sandman (not blood or organs, because, keep in mind, this is a T game, but something like sand like in the movie, or perhaps web, or a generic wed wave would be nice). The knockback of this move is really quite excessive. Reducing it to medium, above average, or good would be wise. The same applies to the Up Tilt, but it is not so generic. Ok... so the Down Tilt has low beginning lag, high ending lag, and medicre reach? For a move that causes tripping this is more than reasonable. Hell, you might even want to buff the damage a bit (5% at most).

Smashes
The Side Smash is cool. Really, you just need to include it's lags, and, if you really wanted to impress, priority and hitstun, as well as any other properties you feel like adding in. This move had better be slow for the very high knockback that it causes. The Up Smash is the same story, it being fairly clever and interesting. The Down Smash, though the most generic, is also the most detailed of his smashes.

Anyway, I think you get a general idea of this. I'm sorry but I simply don't have time right now to comment the whole thing... What I said for those parts of the moveset should apply to the whole thing (in addition, read the comments on the other movesets and compare yours to theirs.) When you have done all you can to improve your set, go to the Stadium and ask for an official review. I may be a former MYM authority, but I am no longer. MasterWarlord is a good reviewer if you can take his harshness. Spadefox is basically like Warlord. Kibble sugarcoats things, but atleast you won't be offended. All of their opinions basically count for more than mine, atleast in this contest. Overall, I thought your set was one of the better newcomer sets, but it was missing a few details here and there (though it was much better at this than the other three I have commented on in this area). Its biggest problem was probably an overuse of punches and kicks (a fault of the character, not you.) It would be a good idea to keep looking at the works of others. I'm not going to advertise myself as one of the greats, but MasterWarlord, SirKibble, Spadefox, and King K. Rool are all highly respected moveset makers. Learning from them may be key to exceling in this contest.

I'm not the go-to-guy. I'm just giving good comments because noone else is. If you want a full review, you can get one on The Stadium (which has a link on the first post of MYM5). I have not seen your set.. link it?

Those were good free for alls, besides all the matches that ended early
That was amazing when you were Captain Falcon fighting ness, and jumped
UNDER the stage and did your b-up, got ness and got back to the ledge

edit: I just remembered. After you got him with your B-up you jumped up and spiked him :D

That was the coolest thing all day.

Good games man, sorry for SDing when you were sonic, I was just too
frustrated to fight him. After you left I did better in some free for alls lol.

Yeah, haven't had much time to play though. Homework and all, been trying out Dedede and R.O.B.

Hey sry i couldnt let u join my room i was about to do a tourney match... which i lost XD

Sorry, 1 min please.

Hey, want to fight soon?
And lol, if your talking about me, me and my brother weren`t
teaming up on you.

Heh, with some luck I remember my own. But I have your FC already, I will add you, its that ok?

... Ah sorry i've got a bad memory, but whatever it was it might have been like the zelda match where two attacks collide and one of them doesn't look like it hit at all... that or just a minor miscalculation? haha

wait vertical fight?

haha true that does make sense, haha my bowser isn't the best i kind of got lucky that ditto round leveling things out

haha wow that was the most epic ending for zelda nad bowser ever too bad it was soo long D': ggs your bowser is really tough! i kept killing my self with peach too hahah

Sure that sounds good ill be there soon

Haha well his brother is just a taunting diddy so it was like one and a half people against you

Haha yeah i got that after u joined my match XD

Play your... boozah? hahah i will, but what's a boozah

Yep i be here

Nice, spiderman would be a pretty awesome character the way you described it

I can provide links to the previous discussions, but I don't think they will ever be stickied.

Maybe.

I'll think about it.

Aryman...

I still need to get revenge on him for last time.

Needs more Out Of Shield Up-B.