Iced Coffee, the best way to economics.

[RyuReiatsu]

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"Hey, whatchu doing now?"
"Me? Going to work, man. Busy n' ****s."

... That's what I've heard, from unidentified faces. Or more like I don't care to the point of not minding people around me. Should I call them friends? ... You tell me.

"Hey, where you goin'?", they ask.
"The metro.", I reply.
"Yaw! Wait up, don't be so rushy bro!", one of them says.

... ... Ironically, I listen and wait for him. Like some sort of trained pet, I stand there quietly. At times, laughing at stupid claims some manage to shoot out, that I barely even understand. I'm laughing. I'm laughing.

... "Haha! You're so ****in' dumb!".

And then, I hear my name from a familiar voice. It repeats it twice and I happen to turn around to see her.
. . .

While making a face that says: "

I'm sorry.", she waves at me. What'd I do? Waved back at her very briefly with a grin and thought: "Get ****ed! *****.". I've then proceeded to ignore her. She had expected me to stop by her, to tell her how much I missed her and maybe even hug her.

See also: Human dog
See also: Taken for granted

She stood there for I don't know how long, since I've had turned my back on her already. ... While leaving with one of the guys, I've suddenly thought: "Why the **** do I even care?".

"If you cannot see one without feeling emotions toward him/her, it means that you care in a way or another. Good or Bad."

Ick. Urh. Argh.
I've then realized how stupid was I.
Did I really forget about her? Is it only when I don't see her, that I'm far away from her that my feelings are gone? I'm kinda wondering myself. One thing for sure, I've got impulses that push me to take revenge upon her or at least pretend to show her how I've become happy ever since she went out of my life. But that's a pretty big lie, because I was always pretty mood jumpy to begin with.

As if I wanted her to suffer. As if I haven't let go of everything regarding her... This is a shame. I don't want to fall back into that pit.

And so, we arrived at our usual Metro, him and I... And went getting an iced coffee. I wonder why I've asked him to get one because in reality, I didn't feel like it one bit. Not to mention that I hate spending money wastefully. Yes, I'm that cheap.

Arriving at the Tims, he got an Iced Cappuccino and I, wanting something different than our usual stuffs, went for an Iced Coffee. In the end, we left immediately after receiving our orders. He went back home and I've missed my train...

Because my sister arrived a single minute late.


So in the end, I've wasted 45 minutes for the next train, didn't get to chill with a guy I can't even stand in reality and lost $2.25 exactly. Yeah, it bothers me that much.


In short, I love Iced Coffee.
They give me stomach aches.

EDIT: This was written in 2 chunks. Which is why it seems so jumpy and badly written.

 

[Indigo Jeans]

Uuummmm...
what?

 

[RyuReiatsu]

Uuummmm...
what?

Pretty much like a "Cool story, bro."
But I don't mind. It's just a blog, feel free not to post when you don't give a **** lol.

 

[Indigo Jeans]

I actually should've given some constructive critisicm. So here it goes.

You seem to be trying to imitate the slightly vague style of El Nino's latest blog. But you're taking it a bit too far. His blog didn't really need to give names, as it wasn't focusing on people, but yours focused on this "she" and "he". It would've made it a little better to have given names.

You style of setup also seems remeniscent of El Nino's. Try to give a bit more info if you're going to make them one-line paras.

Finally, have a central plot or lesson to your story. It seems to be bouncing from unforgivingness, to cynic, to your friend, to coffee.

That's pretty much my two cents, I guess.

 

[RyuReiatsu]

I actually should've given some constructive critisicm. So here it goes.

You seem to be trying to imitate the slightly vague style of El Nino's latest blog. But you're taking it a bit too far. His blog didn't really need to give names, as it wasn't focusing on people, but yours focused on this "she" and "he". It would've made it a little better to have given names.

You style of setup also seems remeniscent of El Nino's. Try to give a bit more info if you're going to make them one-line paras.

Finally, have a central plot or lesson to your story. It seems to be bouncing from unforgivingness, to cynic, to your friend, to coffee.

That's pretty much my two cents, I guess.

I'm not trying to imitate him. I actually write like that in french.
But most people could say I'm a ripoff. not like I can really prove you wrong. Could be it, unconsciously. Or whatever it is. It says people develop styles by ripping off from many.

I just felt like writing like I usually did back in time, vaguely.
And it's pretty jumpy because I've written the first part on my iPod while I was heading home and the rest of it was on the comp while I'm incredibly sleepy.

I'll be heading to bed.
You can perceive me as a plagiarist if you want. I'd rather not have the kind of posts as your first ones though, thanks for the C+C.
Maybe I should stop blogging, it always sucks.

 

[urdailywater]

Hmm iced coffeeeeeee




I like it a lot more than frappicunios. Though they are still good, it's just hard to find one without having so little to it.




You didn't waste your 2 dollars. Coffee is the best creation ever.

I've been drinking it ever since I was still drinking out of the bottle.

 

[El Nino]

You style of setup also seems remeniscent of El Nino's.

That's because we're clones.

But most people could say I'm a ripoff.

I'm sure you could ripoff better writers. That's what I do.

I didn't know people wanted criticism on blogs. But if that's the case:

She had expected me to stop by her, to tell her how much she missed me and maybe even hug her.

I think "she missed me" is supposed to be "I missed her," am I right?

In short, I love Iced Coffee.
They give me stomach aches.

It's cool that "love" is used in a way in which it may not necessarily mean love.

If you want to work on your writing, then what this piece could use is some context. Obviously the girl is an ex, and running into an ex is usually pretty awkward, but we could use some background to help us understand the significance of it. We don't need a step-by-step replay of the relationship; just a couple sentences would work.

Blogs are hard to critique. In a private journal, you wouldn't have to worry about context or quality because no one will read it but you. Public journals are slightly different though.

I don't like iced coffee. I used to take it black. Now I'm switching to decaf. I don't need irregular heartbeats.

 

[RyuReiatsu]

That's because we're clones.
Haha, thanks.

I'm sure you could ripoff better writers. That's what I do.
No comment. Lol.

I didn't know people wanted criticism on blogs. But if that's the case:
Actually, not really. But I'd rather have criticisms than things like what he's posted at first.

I think "she missed me" is supposed to be "I missed her," am I right?
Good point, I'll edit that A.S.A.P. I guess it's because I'm always so tired lately.

It's cool that "love" is used in a way in which it may not necessarily mean love.
I had to use it that way, seriously.

If you want to work on your writing, then what this piece could use is some context. Obviously the girl is an ex, and running into an ex is usually pretty awkward, but we could use some background to help us understand the significance of it. We don't need a step-by-step replay of the relationship; just a couple sentences would work.
I'll work on it, thanks. One thing though, I was very hesitant to write names for some reasons. Which is what made me go:"Hey, let's make it confusing!

Blogs are hard to critique. In a private journal, you wouldn't have to worry about context or quality because no one will read it but you. Public journals are slightly different though.
There's nothing I can really say about that point x_x.

I don't like iced coffee. I used to take it black. Now I'm switching to decaf. I don't need irregular heartbeats.
I don't really know if I like iced coffee, to be honest. It seems that I often want to get some... and then I happen to feel like puking when I'm done drinking it.

Replied in green.

Hmm iced coffeeeeeee




I like it a lot more than frappicunios. Though they are still good, it's just hard to find one without having so little to it.




You didn't waste your 2 dollars. Coffee is the best creation ever.

I've been drinking it ever since I was still drinking out of the bottle.

At first, I agreed... Until I thought of slushpuppies LOL.