Oxymoron Man
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Hi there.
I've been given an assignment by my English teacher to create and present an argument for or against a particular motion. The topic I have chosen is Capital Punishment in Britain and I have chosen to support its re-introduction. My speech has to be up to 5 minutes long, it's recommended that it contains no grammatical errors, it is persuasive and fluid and above all I should be able to answer any questions or counter-arguments. I am going to put up my argument but it hasn't been checked grammatically yet, I have read through it critically and it isn't finished. However, I would like some real-time support because its deadline is not far from now. I would really appreciate it if you could have a good read of it and criticise the argument (assume that the conclusion is that capital punishment should be introduced in Britain), explain to me how I can improve it or present it better (I am preparing a supplementary powerpoint presentation for it too) and how I can make it more convincing. English is my native language so grammar shouldn't be a priority when criticising it as I will deal with it. I WILL CONTINUE TO UPDATE THIS AS I WRITE IT. Thanks in advance!
Here it is:
Britain is at its apex in violent crimes. Are you not concerned that there is an increasing amount of aggressive criminals, roaming our streets to satisfy their cruel demands? And what will YOUR peers feel when they have been sexually violated beyond disapprobation?
General capital punishment was abolished in Great Britain to some extent in 1969 but was only fully abolished in 1998 when the death sentence for treason, piracy with violence and military offences had been hitherto legal. Public votes determined whether the act should be abolished but debates have continued since then as to whether it should be reintroduced in Britain. It is currently legal for a spectrum of crimes in countries such as China, the USA and Saudi Arabia. Capital punishment became perceived as
Hi there.
I've been given an assignment by my English teacher to create and present an argument for or against a particular motion. The topic I have chosen is Capital Punishment in Britain and I have chosen to support its re-introduction. My speech has to be up to 5 minutes long, it's recommended that it contains no grammatical errors, it is persuasive and fluid and above all I should be able to answer any questions or counter-arguments. I am going to put up my argument but it hasn't been checked grammatically yet, I have read through it critically and it isn't finished. However, I would like some real-time support because its deadline is not far from now. I would really appreciate it if you could have a good read of it and criticise the argument (assume that the conclusion is that capital punishment should be introduced in Britain), explain to me how I can improve it or present it better (I am preparing a supplementary powerpoint presentation for it too) and how I can make it more convincing. English is my native language so grammar shouldn't be a priority when criticising it as I will deal with it. I WILL CONTINUE TO UPDATE THIS AS I WRITE IT. Thanks in advance!
Here it is:
Britain is at its apex in violent crimes. Are you not concerned that there is an increasing amount of aggressive criminals, roaming our streets to satisfy their cruel demands? And what will YOUR peers feel when they have been sexually violated beyond disapprobation?
General capital punishment was abolished in Great Britain to some extent in 1969 but was only fully abolished in 1998 when the death sentence for treason, piracy with violence and military offences had been hitherto legal. Public votes determined whether the act should be abolished but debates have continued since then as to whether it should be reintroduced in Britain. It is currently legal for a spectrum of crimes in countries such as China, the USA and Saudi Arabia. Capital punishment became perceived as