The Last Goodbye

[SonicBoom2]

Screams you've left behind,
Were they for joy or fear?
Love that was gone so slow,
Fire can only clean out so much...

I'm Leaving for good,
Leaving for the better,
Leaving for the trust,
In hopes that it will stay.

Just say one more word,
It won't matter,
I don't want to be right there,
Something is still standing in between.

Now, farewell is so weak of a word.
Just fly, swim, run away,
Because bye is too short to suit
So for the nights on and on:

Goodbye.


This is really wishy washy right now, so I was hoping I could get opinions on how it would be better.

 

[Neon Ness]

What? Wishy washy? It looks great. Just edit some minor stuff so that the delivery is more effective.

Line 2: Change "We're" to "were".
Line 14: Not actually a grammatical error, but I think instead of "Flight, swim, run away," it would sound better as "Fly, swim, run away", so that all 3 are imperative.

 

[SonicBoom2]

Whoah! Didn't notice I put those in.
lol Ill change them, they weren't supposed to be like that.

Minor edits added.