The Art and Aesthetic Value of Metroid Prime (Term Paper Critique)

[Jack Kieser]

So, wasn't sure where to post this exactly, but I figured since this is a writing forum, it'd be a good place. So, here's the setup. I just finished writing my most-likely mostly-final draft of my Aesthetics term paper about art and Metroid Prime. It clocks in at just about 17 full pages, not including bib and appendix (total, about 22).

What I'm looking for is a general critical eye. Sure, if you see grammatical errors, please let me know, but I think I got most of them. I'd just generally like a critique about composition: does it flow well, is the argument understandable, do I ramble in some parts, anything need trimming? Really, anything constructive works. Thanks in advance, and I hope you guys like it; I tried to be as seriously academic as I could.

Oh, and since it's so long, I'm not posting it inline; it's going to be a Word 2010 .doc file I'm hosting on Mediafire. Link below. Thank you all again in advance. ^_^

http://www.mediafire.com/?nrdbpad9gm9jzo9

 

[Jam Stunna]

When do you have to turn this in? I want to help you out, but I don't know if I'll find the time to read this before the weekend.

 

[Jack Kieser]

I don't have to turn this in until the 15th. You have time. ^_^

 

[Strong Badam]

I'd change Art to Artistic in the title.

17 pages is a lot of words, I'll maybe see if I can proofread some of it after I wake up lol.

 

[Jack Kieser]

Hey, just updating that I'm still looking for some comments and criticisms. I'm considering getting this published somewhere, and all of the commentary and criticism I can get are helpful. Thanks to everyone in advance.