Kirby enemy rap, whoa- updated!

[Zook]

Well, on Fridays, study hall get's pretty boring. So, in my boredom, I wrote this really bad rap....

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Yeah, we're the enemies of the pink ball!
Hopefully, one of us will make it into Brawl!
Yup, it's, the baddies of Dream Land!
Spokin' pot and gettin' high every chance we can!

Hey, yo, G, my name is Waddle Dee!
The most pleniful of all of us, certainly!
The people on my hitlist are all over the map!
Yet Kirby kills us off like peices of crap...

I'm a pimpin' dude, my name is Sir Kibble!
I intimidate and kill with my blade, fo' shizzle!
I go around slicing, just me and my homes!
But when I mess with kirby, I get owned...

Yeah, we're the enemies of the pink ball!
Hopefully, one of us will make it into Brawl!
Yup, it's, the baddies of Dream Land!
Spokin' pot and gettin' high every chance we can!

Yo, my name is Crash, and I'm really da bomb!
Don't look now, but I'm ******* your mom!
When I detonate, everything gets roasted!
But when face Kirby, I get toasted...

Yeah, I'm a Rocky, all red and round!
I've played with people all night, all over the town!
When I turn to stone, I'm invincible, that's that!
But when I meat up with Kirby, I break my back...

Yeah, we're the enemies of the pink ball!
Hopefully, one of us will make it into Brawl!
Yup, it's, the baddies of Dream Land!
Spokin' pot and gettin' high every chance we can!

Hey, yo, *****, I'm a Pichu!
I may not be a Kirby baddy, but I'm bad*** cute!
I don't take no ****, and you've got some luck,
'cause I'm taking out my Ekans and I'm ready to ****!

Hey! Hey! Oh! Oh!
Let's take our game to Smash!
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[myth_3]

I was very hestitant about this when i read the title, but i after i read the rap i thought it was fun.

Overall, i thought it was cute, so when i read the censored/"naughty" parts i was a little dissapointed.

I say more cute. Make it PG. B/c that's what kirby is. One of the few kiddy titles that's cool.

And i thought it was pretty nice to write this from the perspective of the bad guys. Kirby is a silent character, so i can't really imagine him having a voice.

I really do hope you continue to work on this.

 

[The_Smash_Champ]

You must of been really bored lol...It was funny, i sometimes had to go back to get the rhyme right but i thought over all good i guess...

 

[chubble]

u must have been very very bored lol

 

[Zook]

All right, I was going to make a new thread about this, but I'll just bump this one. I need more feedback on it's sheer pwnage.

 

[KalimariDark]

The timing felt a little odd at parts (as far as how I was reading it is concerned), but I actually enjoyed the random bad language and inane pichu cameo, being so out of character that it was indeed rather humorous. I don't know, maybe I'm easily amused, and shouldn't bump old attention-whoring threads XD

Good night. (Sleep-time now, kthxbai)

 

[Akebo]

I found that this was funny. but I agree tat it should be turned down. You can make a seperate rap about this, but Kirby's innocent. t'd be wrong to exploit that. Once again, anothe person is OOC.

 

[Akebo]

It was okay, maybe a little funny at times. I really think that this should have a amrker as to what it really is on the topic. I have no idea....a rating system? And I also think you shouldn't exploit innocent Kirby like that.