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Jam Writes a Story: Main Character Design

Jam Stunna

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The idea here is to detail my writing process from a creative standpoint. I'll skip over the nuts and bolts of actually writing because it's pretty boring, unless readers really want me to go into that. I don't think these are necessarily lessons, just me sharing my thought processes as I move from concept to creation. I may sound like I'm speaking authoritatively here, but I'm not. This is just what I think about stories and their construction (and this will read much better if I don't have to constantly write "I think").

For this project, I'll be using a story I came up with a few years ago. I had pretty extensive notes for it, but it wasn't very good. I think the premise is still pretty good, so I want to rework it after having spent alot of time reflecting on it.

Main Character

General Thoughts
There are two different types of stories: plot driven and character driven. In plot driven stories, the reader is primarily concerned with what will happen next in the story. In a character driven story, the reader is focused on the interactions between the characters. Every story needs both plot and characters, but we can usually determine which element is stronger, or more central to our enjoyment. A TV show like LOST is a great example of a plot-driven story; people tuned in each week to see what would happen, what new secrets would be revealed. Most sitcoms are character driven; as plot elements don't always carry over between episodes and we're interested in what humorous situation develops between the characters.

In gaming, I characterize the difference in plot and character with the two most popular Final Fantasy games, 6 and 7. The plot of 6 is actually really basic and dull: defeat the Evil Empire. There's only one major plot twist, and most people could have seen it coming from miles away. What players enjoyed about FF 6 (including me) were the characters. It had the largest cast of any FF, and the best moments of the game were driven by the characters, and many were actually optional: Celes' suicide attempt and Cid's death, Shadow's dreams, Locke finding Phoenix, etc.

On the other hand is FF 7. I didn't care for any character in the game (except Vincent, and he comes pretty late in the game), but I found myself pushing forward to answer all the questions the game raised. Who was JENOVA? What really happened at Nibelheim? What was Sephiroth really up to? Uncovering those answers, and finding more questions, was the most satisfying part of 7.

I enjoyed both games, but 6 is my favorite, because I'm someone who responds best to character-driven stories. I believe that strong characters can overcome a weak plot (see: the Battlestar Galactica remake) much more easily than a strong plot can overcome weak characters. The plot is built on the characters, they are the foundation of the story, because someone must experience and interpret the events of the plot for the reader/viewer. You don't have to like the characters, but you at least have to find them compelling and interesting.

Of course, the best of both worlds is a story with strong characters and a strong plot. The most prominent example of this to me was The Wire, where I found myself watching to see what would happen and to see the interactions between the show's various characters. However, constructing strong characters and a strong plot is easier said than done, and it's a talent which eludes me. I prefer to focus on characterization instead.

Therefore, the most important decision that I make as a writer is who my main character will be. That character will be doing most of the narrative heavy lifting throughout the story, but in my case, s/he will also be the hook which either holds the reader's interest or drives them away. I'm no good at writing plots, so my reader will need to find my character compelling, whether they love or hate it. Not only that, but I also have to tailor my character to meet both my and my audience's needs. There are things I'll need that character to do to get me story across, but I also have to keep in mind that my audience has certain expectations and needs as well. After all, I may be writing for myself, but I'm also writing to the reader.

Every decision I make regarding the character then becomes an important one. Will it be a man or a woman? Tall or short? Fat or skinny? Human? Alien? A ghost? A dog? All of the aspects of that character affect what kind of story I can tell, and how my audience will receive that character. So I must decide carefully.

In my next post, I'll begin the design process.
 

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Who is it?
Which comes first- the story or the character? As I mentioned in the last post, the main character has a huge impact both on what kind of story the author can tell, and on what kind of story the audience is expecting. We all have character stereotypes burned into us, whether we realize it or not: the grizzled old man, the cool loner, the seductress, etc. When we see or read certain details about characters, these stereotypes are triggered, and the reader develops expectations about how the character will behave, and how the story will progress. Therefore, it can be useful to design a character that will make it easier to tell the story that we have in mind.

On the other hand, sometimes a character pops into our head. It could be a random image, or something we've seen somewhere else. In this case, the character determines the story. If a picture of a boxer inspires me, then chances are that will heavily impact the story I develop. It doesn't necessarily have to be a boxing story, but the qualities that impressed me about that image are tied to boxing, and those same qualities will be in the story.

For this story, the latter occurred. I was a big fan of Capcom vs. SNK 2 when it was popular. I'd always played Street Fighter, but CvS2 was my first exposure to characters from the SNK stable of franchises. The character design that stood out the most to me was Hibiki Takane of the Last Sword franchise:



In game that, like most fighting games, was bloated with oversexed female characters like Cammy and Morrigan, Hibiki's simple and conservative design really stood out. In addition, I found her fighting style, Musō Shinden-ryū fascinating. Unfortunately, I was awful with her, and only played her occasionally for fun. Her design stuck with me though, lodged in the back of my mind.

I also became a fan of the Fire Emblem series when Super Smash Bros. Melee and Fire Emblem 7 were released in the States. I liked Fire Emblem 7 so much that I sought out the fan translation of Fire Emblem 6 on emulator. It was a great game, and once again one character in particular stood out to me, Fir:



It doesn't take Sherlock Holmes to realize that these two characters have a lot in common from a design standpoint. What I didn't realize until after I did some research was that they both had similar in-game back stories as well. Hibiki's story was okay, but I was greatly interested in Fir's story, as she was the descendant of three characters from Fire Emblem 7.

After learning about Fir, a picture was starting to form in my mind of a character who took elements from both her and Hibiki. My character would be female, petite, and a skilled swordsman. Like Hibiki, she would be looking for someone, and she would be quiet and reserved. Like Fir, she would enjoy fighting, and have dark secrets about her past and her family. Her look would have to be unique though, but I could worry about that later. The character was forming, and I needed to design a world that played to her strengths.

I would need a name as well. I wanted something androgynous, that could work for either a male or a female, as I still wasn't sure how much I wanted her gender to affect her character. I finally settled on the name Reene: simple, not too exotic, and not too feminine or masculine.

She had a name. In the next post, I'll give Reene a story.
 

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Just a quick question Jam, have you ever been published and gotten any of your work out there yet? I get the feeling you're the most expierenced writer on this site.
 

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Ideas, ideas, ideas
As I mentioned in the opening post, this story was an idea I had a long time ago. The project was called Sunset (an auspicious start of ground-breaking storytelling) It started off in a really cliche anime setting. Reene was a mercenary and an assassin who fought with a katana. Her story was a tale of revenge: she was looking for her former master, who had turned her into a cold killing machine through years of brutal training. She hardly spoke, and was perfectly efficient in her fighting style. It wasn't until she met a boy named Hul that she began to thaw, as she saw herself in him when she was his age. They traveled together until she finally found her former master, a man named Victor, to exact her revenge on him.

Not exactly the most original story ever told.

The sword and anime feel were heavily influenced by the characters I was basing mine off of, but thankfully I had a few friends read over the notes I had, and they pointed out that I was basically writing really bad anime. Which was literally true: I conceived the idea as an animated show, and wrote it as if I was writing episodes. I didn't use screenwriting format at the time (because I didn't know it), but the story was divided into episodes.

After receiving their criticism, I basically scrapped the idea and took it back down to nothing but Reene. What could I do with this character that wasn't a bad version of Rurouni Kenshin? I still wanted to write it as if I was writing a TV show, but everything else had to change.

The following are a series of notes I wrote up between 2003-2006. It's a better picture of the changes that occurred to the story than if I tried to recall them all from memory. However, it's an incomplete picture, as many of the notes I wrote have been lost as I've transferred these files from computer to computer. Even without them all, it's an interesting look at the process I went through.

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I'm almost embarrassed to post this, because it may literally be the most cliche and unoriginal thing I've ever written. Reene still has her sword in this version of the story.

Sunset

A twig snapped in the distance. Reene stopped suddenly, her eyes sweeping over the landscape. The once lush and thriving forest was now little more than a graveyard of shattered tree trunks and petrified wood. Life had long since left this place, and she knew that the ghosts of the men who had died there couldn’t make that noise.

She clutched her scabbard, extending her senses. There was a faint rustling to her left, which she recognized as the wind blowing softly through her brother’s clothing. He looked at her, a little bit of fear in his eyes. “What is it, Reene?”

She turned for only a moment, and shot a glance at him that cut him deeper than any weapon could. He immediately lowered his head in silent apology. He knew better than to talk when Reene was focused on something. If she missed even the slightest smell coming downwind, it could cost them their lives.

Another unnatural sound came in from behind her, to the right. It was as if something was trying to sneak up on them. Yet the sounds were too muffled, too quiet. She was straining her hearing to the max just to catch a hint of it. No animal native to this region could walk with such care. At least, no animal on four legs.

“Run when I tell you to.” she whispered quietly to her brother. He nodded quickly, turning his back to her. The droplets of a nervous sweat burned dully in his eyes, despite the numbing cold that was biting at his fingers. It had been cold before, and he’d survived. But he couldn’t remember the last time he’d been this cold and this hungry. A loud crack jarred him out of his thoughts.

“GO!” she yelled. She drew her katana, and it flashed brighter than the sun that beamed brightly over them. Hul bolted as fast as he could, or tried to. He slipped on a loose rock, falling forward. His arm stuck a fallen tree, and he yelped in pain. She heard his cry, keeping her focus forward.

A low grunt warned her of the coming attack. Instinctively, she placed her sword in front of her face in a basic defensive movement, and braced herself against the force of a silvery object clanged against her blade. She pushed forward, throwing her assaulter off balance, and stepped back to regain her footing.

He was a bear of a man, easily over seven feet tall. He held a finely crafted long sword in his left hand, and an obsidian shield in the other. Red hair spilled recklessly from underneath his fur hide cap, and his boots were halfway laced up to his mid calf. Reene’s first impression that this was some hermit looking to cash in on the reward was soon dispelled when she saw the tattoo of a burning star on his right shoulder. This man was a bounty hunter.

“We meet at last, young lady. It has been difficult tracking you these last couple of weeks, but I knew my patience would pay off if I waited long enough.” his smile was wider than her head.

She grudgingly acknowledged his skill. That a man his size had managed to avoid her detection for possibly two weeks was impressive. However, she immediately recognized his lack of skill as a swordsman. He’d done well to have caught her somewhat off guard, but now nothing could save him.

“Why don’t we just make this easy. If you just lay your sword down, I promise I won’t kill you” he chuckled. “You’re worth more to me alive anyway.” Reene took her sword, and placed it back in its scabbard.

The large man laughed loudly. “I see you’ve made the smart decision. I’ll tell you what. Since you gave yourself up, I’ll make the brat‘s death quick. There may not be a bounty out on him, but fresh organs fetch a hefty price tag these days.” Reene’s eyes drew together angrily. “Oh, I see I’ve hit a sensitive spot with you. Is that your brother? Your cousin? Maybe even your son?!” he laughed again.

Reene didn’t respond. The bounty hunter’s smile faded. “You dare to ignore me? It doesn’t matter either way, because your both mine now.
After that, I started making some changes. Reene was no longer an assassin, but instead a soldier. She still had her swords though, which actually made even less sense. Why would she fight with a sword when everyone else is using guns and biological weapons? Needless to say, this version of the story didn't last long.

Sunset
Notes

Characters
Reene- Age: 29; Weight: 125 lbs; Height: 5’6”; Blood Type: A +; Gene type: II; Hair Color: Black; Eye Color: Black; Military Service: 14 years; Rank: Special Operations Chief (Deactivated). Weapons: Katana, Wakizashi, Tanto. The main character in the story.

Hul- Age: 12; Weight: 120 lbs; Height: 5’2”; Blood Type: O +; Gene Type: I; Hair Color: Black; Eye Color: Black; Military Service: None. Weapons: Wakazashi. Reene’s brother.

Cardin- Age: 62; Weight: 249 lbs; Height: 6’4”; Blood Type: B -; Gene Type: II; Hair Color: Brown; Eye Color: Brown; Military Service: 40 years; Rank: General (Deactivated). Weapons: .50 Caliber machine pistol. Commanding officer of Special Operations Unit.

Ames- Age: 48; Weight: 160 lbs; height: 5’4”; Blood Type: A -; Gene Type: IV; Hair color: Black; Eye color: Blue; Military Service: 30 years; Rank: Special Operations Master Chief (Deactivated). Reene’s training specialist.

Plot

A devastating war has ravaged an entire population. In the fierce battles, biogenetic weapons were used against everyone, military and civilian alike. In the wake of the war, a dazed and diseased population struggles to recover, left resorting to thievery, violence, and murder simply to survive. Through this desolate landscape wanders a former soldier, an assassin who finds herself obsolete in a “new world’s order”. She travels aimlessly with her younger brother, trying to find a home for themselves. In order to do so, she must shed her past and look to the future to find a reason to live in a world that has seemingly lost all beauty.

However, there are those in the world that need her dead at last, despite the end of the war. She’ll have to contend with organ stealers, bounty hunters, new enemies and old friends to finally find peace for her and her brother.
At this point, I go all in with the military idea. Reene is now a soldier in her country's army, and she is part of an invading force attacking a neighboring country. The notes below were questions I asked myself while making the transition from the other versions of the story to the new one:

Sunset
Possible Changes

1. How much different would the overall story be if Reene had volunteered to join the army?

2. Instead of Victor being her former mentor, he could be someone who killed her partner
or something like that.

3. If Reene volunteered, how does her character change? And if she’s less one dimensional, what does it do to Hul’s character?

4. If Reene’s character changes, is Hul even necessary?

5. Hul stays. Reene is still a soldier, and is still re-adjusting to peace time.

6. Better yet, Victor is Reene’s former best friend. He betrayed her and their unit during the war.

7. The war may also change. Instead of being a civil war, it would introduce an interesting moral conflict if Reene volunteered to join an army that was in the process of conquering a neighboring country. Kurin’s disease is still a factor though.

8. With Reene’s personality change, is Will really necessary anymore?

9. Also, since the tone of the whole series becomes brighter with Reene’s new personality, is it still fitting that in the end she develops Kurin’s disease?

10. In case I haven’t noticed, with the absence of “Victor the evil mentor” and other differences, Reene’s personality is much brighter. This makes a title change necessary, among other things.

11. Hanah’s character must change. She could still be old, by being Victor’s mother. Or she could be Victor’s sister, or girlfriend.

12. Reene does take on a few more negative personality traits. She’s a racist (more specifically, she hates the people of the country she helped to invade), she smokes (?), and after years of fighting, she’s learned to devalue life. She may also be secretly suicidal.

13. Being suicidal is an interesting thing for her to be. It can be introduced in the episode “A Warrior’s Duty”, expanded upon in the three episodes near Sheeba, explained in Fool’s Gold (why she takes such a dangerous job as mining), and remedied in First Contact. It also puts the excitement back into “Fear of Death”, gives her a reason to get Kurins, and finally explains the title of the final story episode, “What You Live For”. Points 12 and 13 (in addition to anything else about Reene) will be further explained in “Reene Redesign II”)

14. Reene also dislikes her family, which was one of the reasons she joined the army. This is introduced in several episodes (specifically “His Mother‘s Eyes”) , explained in “Family Matters”, and (somewhat) remedied in “First Contact”.

15. If Reene hates everything, then how does she hook up with Hul in the first place?

16. Episodes 8-9 (“Dogs of War”, “To Arms Once More”): change Max into a general who refuses to believe that the war is over because he can‘t accept defeat.

17. The two warring countries: Rivelya and Surindal.

18. Reene didn’t liberate Hul’s medical camp. During a massive counterattack from Surindal (the one that ended the war), the camp is destroyed. Reene’s company is stationed nearby, and she finds Hul wandering and takes him in.
In my original idea for the new version, the story was going to take place over two seasons. In the first, she would do a bunch of awful things, ending with Victor's attempt to kill her. The second season was going to be about her search for him. I came up with a bunch of notes to explain what was going to happen over those two seasons.

Sunset
Profile: Reene

Physical Description
Name: Reene
Family Sign: Saruto (See Picture)
Age: 24 (At beginning of Season 1)
Sex: Female
Height: 5’5”
Weight: 122 lbs
Measurements (Tentative): 36B-24-30
Hair color: Dark Brown
Eye Color: Brown

Brief Chronology
Note: This calendar is based on the rule of the New Rivelyan Royal Family. As such, the starting year 0 is the first year that King Lyne ruled. There are several other unofficial Rivelyan calendars, and dates vary because of this. For the purpose of this story, the New Rivelyan Royal Family Calendar will be used.
535- Dan is born.
537- Reene is born.
550- Reene reaches the Age of Ascension.
- Rivelya and Suridin break diplomatic relations.
551- Rivelya invades Suridin.
552- Dan joins the Grand Army of Rivelya.
554- Reene joins the Grand Army of Rivelya.
558- Reene promoted to staff sergeant.
559- Reene meets Dr. Meldin, receives special gun.
-Battle of Ari-Ko. Dan is killed in action.
-Reene transfers to Special Forces.
560- Reene graduates from Special Forces School. Promoted to Master Sergeant, placed with the 3rd
Counter Insurgency Platoon.
561- Reene and the 3rd Counter Insurgency Platoon destroy Sitirn, Reene paralyzed.
562- Reene promoted to 1st Sergeant, placed on restricted duty.
- Reene and Hul set out to find Victor.

Character and Personality
Reene is a pretty average person. Her family was a middle class working family that lived in the city of Goul. At her ceremony for the Age of Ascension (the ceremony occurs at the age of 13), Reene expressed her desire to join the Grand Army of Rivelya as an officer. Her parents immediately disapproved, and a small rift began to form between them. Reene had an outstanding relationship with her older brother, Dan. They were very close, and did lots of things together. After the invasion of Suridin, Dan joined the army in order to protect Reene from being drafted eventually. Dan’s departure was hard on Reene, and her relationship with her parents worsened. Soon, Reene found that she had no reason to stay at home, and enlisted in the army. Her parents saw her act as unforgivable, since Dan had sacrificed himself so that Reene wouldn’t have to join. Reene and her parents stopped talking all together. Reene proved to be an excellent soldier, but rules within the military prevented her from serving in direct combat since she was a woman. She cut her hair and disguised herself as a man, took someone else’s orders and headed straight for the front. Her first combat was in the battle of Yso bridge, where she was wounded and received a field promotion for valor during battle. Her commanding officer protected her from the court marshal she would have faced for being a woman in combat, and she continued to fight well in many of the war’s most dangerous and bloody conflicts. In 559, she met Captain Meldin, a medical officer attached to her battalion. The two became close friends, and fought together. That same year, the Grand Army suffered its worst defeat in history, losing an entire army in the battle of Ari-Ko. The loss was especially devastating for Reene, as her brother was among those soldiers killed during the battle. The death of her brother pushed Reene to work harder at killing the Suridis, whom she’d already hated before. To become the most efficient killing machine possible, Reene transferred to Special Forces training, becoming the first woman to do so. By this time, the Army had abandoned its policy restricting women from combat, and Reene graduated from Special Forces school with a specialty in covert operations and counter-insurgency tactics. She was promoted to Master Sergeant and placed in the 3rd Counter-Insurgency Platoon, under the command of Major Victor. While there, she was reunited with Dr. Meldin. The unit operated independently of any field command, but instead reported directly to the Regional Command of the 2nd Army. Victor’s platoon hunted down and eliminated Suridi insurgent groups, often using methods not condoned by the army, and while ignoring orders from Regional Command. Victor’s blatant disregard for the safety of both civilians and his own soldiers led Reene to begin questioning him, the war, and her own hatred of the Suridis. The conflict between Victor and Reene came to a head during the battle of Sitrin, when Victor decided to use a dangerous super virus against the civilian population of the town. Reene and a few other soldiers tried to stop him, but they were beaten and killed. Reene was seriously wounded, and transferred to an Army hospital where she recovered from paralysis and became friends with a boy named Hul, a Rivelyan who she’d met in Sitrin. After her recovery, Reene was promoted to 1st Sergeant and placed on restricted duty due to “mental health issues”. She then took a year of medical leave, and set off to find Victor, and kill him in an attempt to make him pay for the destruction of Sitrin, her own injuries, and to silence the demons of the war that continued to haunt her.
Sunset
The Turning Point-Notes

Plot: In this scene, Reene has been with the Company C Counter-Insurgency Unit (CIU) for over eight months. They were chasing a group of Suridi insurgents that bombed a Rivelyan Army barracks. Several gun battles with the group occurred, leading to the death of Lieutenant Ken, the executive officer of the CIU. His death enrages Reene, who swears she’ll make his killers pay. In the climactic battle of the story, Reene opens fire on a group that she suspects to be the terrorists. It turns out that it was a caravan of civilians heading away from the fighting, and that she killed several women and children. When Reene realizes that she actually wanted to kill them, she sees how she’s allowed her hatred of Suridin to consume her. That realization sets the stage for her to begin changing, and leads to the events that occur when they pin the actual group they’re after down in Sitrin.

Characters:
Major Victor- Commanding Officer
Captain Meldin- Medical Officer, Reene’s friend
Sergeant 1st Class Reene- Main character
Staff Sergeant Jenan- Weapons specialist, joker
Staff Sergeant Nale- Hard-bit veteran
Sergeant Lumis
Private First Class Ricky- New kid, straight out of Special Forces School

Sidenotes: Should I get rid of Lt. Ken and just have PFC Ricky die? That would get rid of the glut of officers in the unit. But I like PFS Ricky! Then again, if he survives the battle, he won’t be PFC Ricky the next time Reene meets him. He’ll be at least Corporal Ricky, and that doesn’t have the same ring to it.
Sunset
The Battle of Ari-Ko

This battle was one of the pivotal battles of the war between Rivelya and Suridin. The Rivelyan armies hadn’t faced any major setbacks until they attempted to capture the religiously important city of Ari-Ko. The Rivelyan Army Third Army Group was in charge of that region, with the Fourth Army spearheading the operation. There were over 400,000 soldiers in that army, including Reene’s older brother Dan. Dan was a platoon sergeant in the Army, in charge of a platoon of about 40 men. The 4th Army approached Ari-Ko unopposed, and expected a quick battle to secure the city. However, as soon as they reached the city, the Suridis launched a massive and well coordinated counterattack against the entire region, catching the whole 3rd Army Group by surprise. The Army Group was so staggered by the ferocity of the counterattack that it was forced to withdraw over 500 kilometers in a week, leaving the 4th Army totally isolated in the city of Ari-Ko. The 4th Army managed to hold out for nearly two months with no supplies from the outside, and under constant attack from the Suridis. Over 60% of the army was killed, including Reene’s brother. After 56 days, the commanding officer of the 4th Army, Lieutenant General Wesson, finally surrendered to the Suridi forces. When he surrendered, there were less than 150,000 soldiers that surrendered with him. Combined with the losses that the rest of the 3rd Army Group suffered, the Battle of Ari-Ko stands as the worst defeat in the Grand Army of Rivelya’s history. The death of her brother had two effects on Reene. Her anger towards the Suridis drove her to join the Special Forces. Also, his death, in the City of God (as Ari-Ko was also known) caused her to abandon her belief in God, which would have consequences later when she transferred to Special Forces.
Sunset
The Battle of Sitrin

When this part of the story takes place, Reene is 25 years old. She’s been in the Grand Army of Rivelya for eight years, and she’s been fighting in Suridin for almost all of that time. She’s transferred to Special Forces, with the rank of Sergeant 1st Class. This battle is the pivotal event of season 1. For the first part of the season, Reene and her comrades in Major Victor’s Counter-Insurgency unit had been chasing a particular group of Suridi terrorists through the country. At this point, they’ve finally caught up with them, and there is a running battle until they reach the town of Sitrin. After the staggering defeat at Ari-Ko, the Army chose to adopt a more civilian-friendly approach to the war, and made attacking non-affiliated cities a war crime. Victor sees this as his chance to destroy the terrorists, regardless of the damage done to the city and its population. After fighting for several days, Reene begins to question whether or not they are doing the right thing by attacking the city with no regard for civilian deaths. Eventually she discovers that Victor was given specific orders to retreat from Sitrin by Regional Command. She tries to contact Regional Command to confirm the orders, but finds her efforts blocked by those who are loyal to Victor even before they are loyal to the Army and Rivelya. Reene, and a few other soldiers’ discontent with Victor’s policies grows, and eventually the situation comes to a head. Victor had somehow gotten his hands on an experimental biological weapon known as Kurin’s disease, and planned to use it to wipe out everyone in Sitrin. At this point Reene and the soldiers who agree with her rebel, and she finds herself fighting both the Suridis and Victor. It is after she rebels that she first meets Hul. She warns him and his family to get out of the city in case Victor uses his weapon. The battles continue, and eventually Reene’s forces gain the upper hand. They find Victor’s weapon, and attempt to destroy it before he can use it. However, it was an elaborate trap to kill Reene and the other treacherous soldiers. Reene watches as her comrades are cut down around her, before being struck three times by a high powered rifle fired by none other than Victor himself. She passes out, and Victor fires his weapon into Sitrin, releasing the deadly plague on its inhabitants.
Sunset
Purgatory

The purpose of this paper is to describe what happens between the end of Season 1 and the beginning of Season 2. At the end of Season 1, Reene finds herself in a hospital after being shot three times in Sitrin. She suffered major spinal cord injuries, and it was even stated that she would probably never walk again. At the beginning of Season 2, Reene has been promoted to 1st Sergeant, is walking, and most strangely, has the boy named Hul at her side. There’s a lot that happens between the two episodes, so I need to work it out.

After Reene was shot, she collapsed onto the ground. She thinks that she’s dead, but fortunately for her, Hul did not follow her advice and stayed in Sitrin. He managed to drag her into the city, and to relative safety from Victor. Victor and his men had just fired the weapon which contained Kurin’s disease, and wouldn’t risk going into the city for fear that they would contract the disease. While there, A doctor managed to stabilize Reene’s condition. But soon after, people in the city began dying en masse. Kurin’s effects had begin to set in. After a week, over half the population had died. People began panicking, fleeing the city (Note: It’s believed that this was the way that Kurin’s began spreading. As people fled from Sitrin, they passed on the highly contagious, highly unstable disease). An Army unit passing through the city found Hul and the doctor caring for Reene, along with a few others who had chosen to stay. At Reene’s request, they were all sent to the Army Medical Center in Staff, one of the most advanced medical facilities in either Rivelya or Suridin. It was there that Reene discovered that she was paralyzed, and where her long recovery process began. The doctor eventually succumbed to Kurin’s disease, but to everyone’s surprise, neither Reene or Hul developed symptoms. Reene suspected that her immunity had something to do with a medication that Victor forced his soldiers to take. No one could explain Hul’s immunity, though, and he was kept at the center for further testing. As Reene struggled to recover from her injuries and Hul endured many painful tests, their bond grew stronger. They began to see each other as family, or at least the only family they had. Hul’s real family had been killed in Sitrin. Reene’s brother was dead, and her relationship with her parents was less than ideal. Reene’s mental health was also pushed to the limits in the hospital. She often overheard conversations that she wasn’t supposed to hear, regarding Kurin’s disease, her injuries, and the war in general. The truth, combined with her struggles to overcome her injuries, was almost too much to handle, pushing her to the edge of sanity. Only Hul’s presence managed to keep her grounded and motivated. Eventually, after a year of hard work, Reene miraculously recovered from her physical injuries. However, her mental injuries went much deeper, and there were still lots of unresolved issues. Her strength and bravery in the recovery process earned her a promotion to 1st Sergeant, but her mental instability got her transferred out of Special Forces and placed on restricted duty. She was also given special dispensation to travel with Hul, who supported her and was instrumental to her mental health. After a few months of desk duty, Reene asked for medical leave to get her affairs in order, and it was granted. She would have a year to do whatever she needed to, while still enjoying the benefits and privileges of being in the Grand Rivelyan Army. Eventually, Reene came to the conclusion that the only way she could live with herself was to make Victor pay for what he did to Sitrin, and her specifically. With the year of leave, she set off on a journey to find Victor, and kill him. This is where Season 2 begins.
I also started tossing around ideas for episodes. Even though I was trying to get away from the absurd cliches of anime, I was still heavily influenced by it at this point, as can be seen in me actually referring to the story as an anime several times.

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Episode Ideas

1. The Road to Vale (A bounty hunter tracks Reene and Hul)*
2. The Dogs of War (Rivelya’s violent history is explained)
3. Those Left Behind (Reene has her first motherly urges with a pair of orphans )
4. Reene (Reene’s first flashback episode deals with her time with Victor)
5.A Warrior’s Duty (Reene is forced into a duel to the death, without her gun)
6. Artemis (The back story to Reene’s gun is revealed)
7. Beyond The Battle (Reene stays with former soldiers trying to rebuild their lives)
8. Fool’s Gold (While Reene searches for gold, Hul is a servant in a mansion)
9. Troubled Waters (Reene is forced to confront her fear of water)
10. Reflections (Reene promises to protect a family at Hul’s request)
11. Shattered (When Rastin dies, Reene and Hul must overcome the unexpected pain of the loss)
12. Terms of Endearment (Reene takes a liking to a young man in town)
13. Family Matters (Reene and Hul recall their families)
14. How We First Met (Hul remembers his first meeting with Reene)
15. Harvest (Reene helps test subjects that have escaped from a local clinic)
16. Descent (Victor‘s new student hunts down Reene and Hul)
17. Where Lilies Bloom (Reene finds herself in the care of a kind old woman)
18. End In Sight* (Reene discovers she has Kurin’s disease)
19. Regrets (Reene meets up with Will again, and Hul‘s jealousy comes through)
20. Victor (Reene finally finds the man she’s been searching for)
21. What You Live For (Will Reene exact her revenge after all she’s been through?)
22. Epilogue: Afterthoughts (Hul re-examines his time with Reene, 5 years later)
23. So Many Tears* (Reene meets the family of her first assassination)
24. Diamond In the Rough (Hul’s memories of his time in the medical camp)
25. To Arms Once More (Violence threatens to explode in Rivelya’s capitol city)
26. The June Blues (Reene takes on a local crime boss)
27. Sitrin (Reene and Hul visit a town decimated by Kurin’s disease)
28. His Mother’s Eyes (Hul’s mother reappears to claim him)
29. Happy Birthday (Hul tries to think of a way to celebrate Reene’s birthday)
30. Golden Skies (Hul learns the price of peace first hand)
31. Just Over the Horizon (Reene meets a family looking for a better life elsewhere)
32. Tapestry (Reene contemplates the events that made her who she is)
33. Hell and Angels
34. Buck Moon (Reene and Hul stop to help a harvest, and experience a simpler life)


Main story: Reene is hunting down her former teacher, Victor. She plans to kill him in an attempt to gain revenge for his cruel treatment of her.

Notes:
1) See notes on Kurin’s disease.
*- Rename at some point

A few quick thoughts: Okay, there are obviously an abundance of anime out there with a gun-toting female heroine. One such example is the show Grenadier. How am I going to distinguish this show from the thousands of other shows it will inevitably have similarities with? The best way, of course, is to have a superior story and characters. I also hope to have a different and interesting setting, thanks to the prevalence of Kurin’s disease. In addition, the fact that the story is primarily character driven, as opposed to plot driven, will hopefully differentiate the series. Finally, I kind of want the show to be like watching a book. It will be somewhat difficult to properly display the internal struggles that Reene and Hul go through, and action sequences will be few and far inbetween, and will most likely not occur every episode. That nay become boring for some, but I hope to make Reene and Hul’s transformations so compelling that flashy battle scenes are used only to supliment the story, not replace it. Missing will be most of the facial expressions and other ridiculous trappings of some anime. Reene will also be a normal looking female; females with overly large breasts and other things of that nature not be used.
After I put down the ideas, I realized that alot of them were just filler, so I instead decided to make the story one season, consisting of 26 episodes. The first season was eliminated, and the story began after Sitrin was destroyed. My notes from there on reflect that change.

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Revenge and Redemption

What is Sunset about? The series begins with Reene taking a year off from the Army, telling her superiors it’s for “personal reasons”. In actuality, she wants to use the time to track down her former commanding officer, Major Victor, and kill him. Her reasons are two fold: First of all, Victor committed one of the worst war crimes in Rivelyan history, by using a biological weapon on the civilian population of a city named Sitrin. Second, and most importantly, Victor tried to kill Reene, leaving her paralyzed for nearly a year. Reene thinks that Victor’s death is her ultimate goal, but as she travels through both Suridin and Rivelya, she discovers several things that lead her to believe that the destruction of Sitrin was not just a random act by Victor, but part of a larger goal. In fact it was. It was only one part of a multi-pronged Army offensive named Operation Sunset. Reene adds finding the truth about Operation Sunset to her list, but keeps revenge against Victor as her main priority. However, after an incident with Hul (explained in episodes 10-14), coupled with the intentions of Operation Sunset, Reene finds herself questioning whether she is really seeking revenge against Victor, or redemption for allowing Sitrin to be destroyed, and her role in the war in general. She struggles with this for the latter parts of the series. So while the show revolves around Operation Sunset and Victor, the story is really about Reene and Hul’s relationship, and Reene’s journey for redemption.
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8 Years of History

Although the series picks up one year after the destruction of Sitrin, the actual story began nearly 7 years before that battle. When Reene was 16, her brother volunteered for the army, in order to save her from being conscripted. However, Reene disobeyed her parents wishes and went ahead and joined the army anyway at the age of 17. Reene spent four years fighting in the infantry, and distinguished herself several times. Then the battle of Ari-Ko occurred. It was Rivelya’s worst military defeat in history, and Reene’s brother was killed during the battle. That event drove Reene to attend Special Forces school, and she graduated in a year with a specialty in counter-insurgency operations behind enemy lines. She was placed under the command of Major Victor in Special Forces Company C, where she was so valuable that she achieved several field promotions. They worked well together, feeding off each other’s hatred for the Suridis. When Reene’s squad killed a group of children by accident, she questioned her unrelenting hatred for the Suridis for the first time. A year later, Company C chased a group of Suridi terrorists into a moderately sized city named Sitrin. The city was eventually destroyed by Victor, and Reene was shot three times and paralyzed in her attempt to stop Victor. She was saved by a young man named Hul, and the two were evacuated to a medical facility in the city of Staff. The two talked many times during Reene’s long road to recovery, and formed an incredibly strong bond. After Reene recovered, she took a year of leave from the army to try and track down Victor, and make him pay for Sitrin and for the things he did to her.
Lastly, I'll share some of the episode lists I came up with. You can see how the descriptions and the episodes themselves change as my overall ideas change. The shorter episode list, which i referred to as Episode Guide CX, was the collection that most closely reflected my final ideas. I made the decision to no longer look at the project as an animated series in the CX guide, and instead aim for something I might actually accomplish someday: a graphic novel.

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Episode Notes Redesign

This is the basis jist of the series. There will be 26 episodes. 25 of them will be regular story episodes, with the 26th being kind of like a reunion show that catches up with the main characters five years after the end of their journey.

Episode 1: On Our way
This is the first episode of the series. It serves to introduce Reene and Hul on a superficial level, as well as the continent of Rivelya and the civil war. Kurin’s disease, Hul’s special condition, and Reene’s past are all alluded to or mentioned in passing, to set up further explanation in later episodes. The basic plot here is that a bounty hunter is after Hul. He wants to capture him and turn him into a government run medical center in exchange for the huge reward. Reene and Hul go about their business, and it is also here that Victor is first mentioned, and their journey to find him. Eventually, the bounty hunter confronts them, and Reene defeats him easily. At Hul’s request, she allows him to live, and the two continue on their way.

Episode 2: Reene
This episode begins to address Reene specifically, and her quest. Basically, she is looking for a man named Victor. When she was nine years old, bandits kidnapped her from her family and sold her to Victor. He raised her, and trained her brutally to become proficient as a soldier and to harden her heart against emotions. She stayed with him for ten years, trying several times to escape. She finally succeeded at 19. Now she hopes to gain vengeance for herself by finding him, and killing him.

Episode 3: Sitrin
Reene and Hul travel through a small city named Sitrin, that has been particularly hit hard by Kurin’s disease. Many of the adults died very early, leaving behind teenagers to take over the role of running the city. This episode explains Kurin’s disease in detail, as well as Hul’s special immunity to it. Basically, Kurin’s disease was developed during the war as a biological weapon. After it was used, it quickly mutated out of control, and spread throughout most of Rivelya. It’s different forms attack different parts of the body, but in the end it is almost always fatal. Hul is special, because he is one of the very rare people that is completely immune to the disease. Reene and Hul spend the night there, and awake to find that their things have been stolen. When Reene tracks down the culprits, she discovers that they are siblings who were orphaned during the war.

Episode 4: Those Left Behind
Reene and Hul are still in Sitrin. Now that they’ve found their stuff, Reene feels a strange urge to make sure the children are cared for. She stays with them for a few days, until a suitable family can be found to take care of them. At first she doesn’t understand why she’s so attached to them, but later realizes that it was the first time she’s ever had any motherly urges. After they are taken in, her and Hul leave the town.

Episode 5: A Warrior’s Duty
Another episode that explains some of Reene’s past. While under the tutelage of Victor, Reene was taught to be an assassin. During the war, she carried out many missions for both sides of the conflict, doing only as she was told to by Victor. Now, after several years, the son of one of Reene’s victims has tracked her down, and demands a duel to avenge his father‘s death. Hul doesn’t understand why either one of them wants this, but both Reene and her challenger understand it. During the duel, Reene’s main weapon jams and becomes useless, leaving her seemingly defenseless. However, Reene carries more than one gun, and uses her other concealed weapons to win. She spares her challenger, explaining that since she no longer obeys Victor, she has no problem with him or his family. The challenger returns home, and Reene and Hul take a detour to get her gun fixed.

Episode 6: Artemis
When they arrive at a special gunsmith, Reene requests that her gun be repaired. Coincidentally, the person who runs the shop is the man who originally made the gun. He explains the gun actually has a name, Artemis, and he shares the story of all the grief he went to in order to make that gun. He also explains to Reene why it jams. The gun was built to have that defect; it was something that Victor had specifically requested. Reene is left to wonder why Victor would give her a weapon that was defective.

Episode 7: Beyond the Battle
This is the first episode that specifically deals with the Rivelyan civil war, and both Reene and Hul’s parts in it. After several days of traveling, Reene and Hul come to a small encampment outside of the major city, Shiba. There, they find several dozen shell-shocked and misadjusted soldiers, who have had difficulty rebuilding their lives after the end of the war. Seeing them reminds both Reene and Hul of some of the horrors they saw during the war. Hul wants to stay with them to try to help, even though Reene advises against it. After a few days, one of them snaps violently, and Reene finally convinces Hul that it’s time to go. Once they reach Shiba, though, they find more problems associated with the war.

Episode 8: The Dogs of War
Now in Shiba, Reene quickly realizes that the entire city is on the brink of exploding into violence. She wants to leave immediately, but sees someone who catches her eye. His name is General Max, someone that she used to work for during both her time with Victor and after she ran away. The people are split, some supporting him in his efforts to take control of the city, while the rest violently oppose him. Reene gets caught up in the politics when the anti-Max groups begin to allege that he had ties to the enemy. The truth comes out: Max had one of his own leaders assassinated to keep the war going, and Reene was the person who was hired for the job.

Episode 9: To Arms Once More
While Reene is trying to accept the role she had in prolonging the most devastating war in Rivelyan history, Shiba’s factions come to blows in small skirmishes. When an attack takes place on a school, the powder keg seems ready to ignite. Wanting to find out the truth from Max, Reene decides to take him out of power. After forcing him to admit the truth about everything, he resigns in disgrace and is promptly jailed. Life slowly begins to return to normal in Shiba, and Reene and Hul continue on their journey.

Episode 10: Reflections
Reene and Hul travel to the town of Named. It’s a medium sized town, but it is known all throughout Rivelya for having the best Kurin’s clinic on the continent. While passing through, a man named Jes contacts her. He tells her that he’s a wealthy man, and will pay her a lot of money if she agrees to protect his daughter for a week. Reene initially declines the job, but Hul wants to try to help as many people as possible. He finally convinces Reene to take the job, saying that they need the money. Jes explains that his daughter is named Lia, and that local thugs have been threatening to kidnap her and demand a ransom. As the week progresses, Reene and Hul become close with Lia. Lia shows Reene her special mirror, and explains that only her friends can see their reflection in it. Lia scoffs at first, but after a few days of spending time with Lia, Reene finds herself looking into the mirror to see if her reflection is there. Lia sees her and laughs, explaining that only her friends would bother to look into the mirror anyway. As the week progresses, they ask her about her family. Lia says too much to them, and Reene discovers the truth. Jes is actually a smuggler, using his position in the clinic to steal medical supplies and sell them on the black market. The business has become more dangerous, as another man named Inis wants to take over Jes’ business. He’s threatened to kill Lia if Jes isn’t out of Named in a week, and has hired several gangs to do the job. One group of thugs is led by a man named Calico, who will do anything for money. However, Jes can’t leave. Lia has Kurin’s disease, and he can only afford to take care of her by staying in Named. Jes offers Reene even more money if she’ll kill Inis. She agrees, but Hul overhears the whole conversation. He pleads with Reene not to kill Inis, and just talk to him. Reene listens, but tells Hul that someone will die, either Lia, Jes or Inis. While Reene is off to talk to Inis, fighting breaks out between the various gangs in Named. Reene hurries back to protect Lia. Calico sees his chance to jump the deadline and claim the reward for himself. Reene appears just in time to see Calico pull the trigger, hitting Lia in the back. She stumbles for a few feet, then falls forward onto her face. Reene races over towards her, but it’s too late. She’s dead.

Episode 11: Shattered
Reene tries her best to resuscitate Lia, but she’s gone. In the commotion, Calico and most of his men manage to escape. Hul is shocked. He wonders how anything bad could be allowed to happen to someone as sweet and kind as Lia, but there she lies, dead. They carry her back to Jes, and deliver her cleaned body to him. Reene tells him to wait three days before burying her, and that she’ll be back by then. Hul asks her where she’s going, but he already knows. She’s going to kill Calico. Once again, Hul argues with her. Reene doesn’t listen to him this time, saying that they’ve tried things his way before, and now she was going to do things her way. Hul insists on going with her though, saying that they’re family, and family has to stick together. They first stop off at Inis’ house, to find out where Calico is. They find Calico’s hideout, and Reene makes short work of most of his guards. One of them shoots her in the left shoulder, but she continues on. She finally reaches Calico, and a brief battle takes place. After she defeats him, Calico sits on the ground, wounded. Reene places the gun to his forehead, and prepares to pull the trigger. Hul can’t watch, and screams for Reene to show mercy, and grabs her arm. Reene reacts violently, knocking Hul to the ground and pointing the gun at him. As their eyes meet, there is a moment where both Reene and Hul think that she’s going to pull the trigger. Calico interrupts though by trying to escape. Reene shoots him again, knocking him to the ground. She leaves Hul where she is, and shoots Calico in the heart. Hul watches in horrified silence as Calico’s lifeless body slumps over. The two go back to Named in silence. They attend Lia’s funeral, and Hul says a few words. Afterwards, Reene stands in front of Lia’s tombstone with the broken mirror in hand. She wonders if killing Calico is really what Lia would have wanted.

Episode 12: How We First Met
Reene and Hul haven’t spoken to each other since Lia’s funeral. The two are still in Named, making final preparations to leave. As Reene is in the hospital having her shoulder looked at, Hul waits in a local tavern. He talks to the barkeep, explaining the events of the last few days. He also tells the story of how he and Reene first met. Reene was still a soldier in the war, and her unit was liberating his medical camp. Hul was in the camp because of his special immunity to Kurin’s disease. After the camp was liberated, he was walking through the debris when he saw Reene. They stared at each other for a while, and Hul knew then that she was the closest thing to a mother he would ever have again. Reene’s heart reached out to his as well. Even though she’d spent the last 11 years of her life fighting and burying her humanity, when she looked at Hul, she saw all the things that she’d lost at the hands of Victor. This was like a second chance to protect those things, and she would do so by protecting Hul. They had been together ever since then, like brother and sister. Hul remembers that Reene was a cold killer when they first met, and that it had taken a lot of talking and time to get her to warm up and try to resolve things without killing. Hul now wonders if she’s gone back to her old ways, and after seeing the look in Reene’s eyes as she pointed the gun at him, he wonders if the last year he spent with her has been a waste of time, and a mistake. Reene comes back from the hospital, and the two silently leave the tavern.

Episode 13: His Mother’s Eyes
Reene and Hul are on their way out of Named, when a stranger stops them. He confirms Hul’s identity, and tells him that a woman in town is looking for him. Reene thinks that they should continue forward, but she feels guilty about what happened with Calico and decides to let him go back. When they get back into town, a woman approaches them. She greets Hul specifically, asking him many different questions. Reene is a little wary of the woman, but Hul, in his naïve goodness, talks to her. She tells him that her name is Keris, and that she’s his mother. At first, Hul doesn’t believe her, but then he notices how much she really does look like his mother. It’s been almost four years since he was taken from the burning debris of his hometown, but his mother’s image was still fresh in his mind. Especially her eyes, the soothing hazel color he’d come to rely on. While he spends time with her, Reene travels all over the city, trying to learn anything she can about Keris. Eventually, Hul becomes comfortable with Keris, and she tells him that it’s time for him to go home. He has serious reservations about leaving Reene, and Reene is not happy to let him go. But after the events of the last few weeks, both of them doubt if they can really stay together for much longer. So, with heavy hearts, they both say goodbye to each other. Reene goes back to the taverns she’s been visiting, and Hul prepares to leave town with Keris. Reene finally discovers that Keris is actually a bounty hunter who’s real name is Kiala, and that her resemblance to Hul’s mother is just a coincidence she exploited to get close to him. She runs out of the bar, but she’s too late. They’re gone.

Episode 14: Second Chances
Keris and Hul have already left the city, but Reene is determined to find them. She retraces all of their footsteps in Named, gathering information about where they’re headed. She discovers that they are going back to Shiba. Reene races after them, hoping that nothing has happened to Hul. In the meantime, Hul continues to talk to Keris. Now that the initial shock and joy at the prospect of having his mother back has faded, Hul is beginning to have second thoughts about leaving Reene behind. In spite of her problems and issues, he loves her and doesn’t want to never see her again. Keris tells him that this is the only way, and that Reene is just a part of a painful past he can now forget. He has become a little bit more skeptical of her, but now it’s too late, and Reene is gone. As she chases them, Reene realizes how much losing Lia hurt both her and Hul, and how much Hul really means to her. She’ll do anything to protect him, including sacrifice her own life. She finally catches up with them, and she confronts Keris directly. A battle eventually starts. As Hul watches, he realizes that his mother is really dead, and is never coming back. All he’s got is Reene. But that’s not a negative in his eyes. All he needs is Reene now, and he wants to always be there to help her find the person she lost to Victor. He throws his full support behind Reene in the battle. Realizing that Hul will no longer go with her, Keris withdraws from the battle. After the fight, Reene and Hul finally sit down and take the time to talk about everything that happened in the last two weeks, and how much they actually mean to each other. With Lia, Jes, Calico and Keris behind them, the two leave Named for good, and continue their journey.

Episode 15: Fool’s Gold
After another week of traveling, Reene and Hul come to a small mining town. Their money is nearly gone, and they both agree to seek out temporary employment while they’re in the town. Reene takes a job working in the mines, digging for gold. Hul, on the other hand, accepts a job as a servant for a wealthy aristocrat in town. Hul learns many things from the old man, who is dying from Kurin’s disease. Reene works relentlessly in the mine under the cruel watch of the foreman, and eventually leads the other mine workers to unionize. Reene also meets a man named Will. He is a little older than her, and runs a small but successful shipping business in town. The two meet several times, and each time Will does his best to impress her. Reene doesn’t notice his attempts until another woman points them out. When she does, she finds herself with a new problem. She’s never had a man chasing after her before, and she doesn’t know what to do.

Episode 16: Terms of Endearment
Reene continues to work in the mine, and also be on the receiving end of Will’s attention. One day, she realizes that she has feeling for him too. She’d been attracted to men before, but never had the time or opportunity to explore those feelings. Now, at the age of 23, she has no idea what to do about it. Hul sees the way she gets whenever Will comes around, and becomes extremely jealous. He starts trying to devise ways to keep them apart, but everything he does seems to bring them closer together. With all this going on, the company that owns the mines sends a group of thugs to break up the union, and kill their leader, Reene. Reene has to find a way to contend with Will’s advances, Hul’s jealousy, the union breakers, and her own feelings. The union breakers prove to be the easiest to deal with, and after a brief show of force, they retreat with their tails between their legs. Hul continues to skulk around, until Reene assures him that she’s not going anywhere, and that Will won’t come between them. Hul only seems half convinced, but stops harassing her about it. Her own feelings are more difficult to deal with though. She talks to the other woman and Will, but doesn’t come to any conclusions. The mining job ends, and Reene and Hul get ready to leave the town. Will promises to see Reene again, and before she realizes what she’s doing, she gives him a kiss on the cheek, and leaves town.

Episode 17: Diamond in the Rough
Reene and Hul continue on their journey, passing through a small town. On the outskirts of the town is a dilapidated medical camp. Seeing the camp brings Hul’s memories of his time in a camp crashing back, and he tells the story to Reene. Hul had the distinction of being immune to all forms of Kurin’s disease, and was a very valuable prisoner. While in the camp, he befriended a much older man named Roger. He looked after Hul, and helped him to survive his first few weeks in the camp. He was also the person who encouraged Hul to keep his optimistic view on the world, promising him that he would escape and have a better life. But Hul’s day in the experiment room was approaching fast, and death was a certainty in there. As a final act of kindness, Roger switched his ID tag with Hul, taking his place when his number was called. Hul promised that he would escape, and that he would make the most of Roger’s sacrifice by living the best he could. With that weight off his shoulders, it seems that Hul has finally escaped his hard past. There is still one thing left, something that was brought up by Kiala’s attempt to impersonate his mother. Hul wants to find his mother’s grave, to pay his final respects and bury his past. Reene agrees, and the two take a detour to try and find her grave.

Episode 18: Family Matters
Pretty simple here: Hul and Reene tell stories about their families while they search for Keris’ grave. I haven’t thought of the stories themselves yet.

Episode 19: First Contact
I haven’t really given that much thought to this episode. Basically, Hul and Reene have no idea where Keris’ grave could be, and find themselves wandering through the woods. They find a mythological creature there, one that is able to let both Hul and Reene relive their memories. Hul thinks about the times he had with his mother, and despite not finding his mother’s grave, he is finally able to accept her death. Reene has already accepted that she will never see her family again, and instead elects to relive some of her experiences with Victor. After doing so, she remembers how to reach him, and they continue their journey.

Episode 20: Descent
Night falls, and Reene and Hul are still in the woods. As they travel, Reene suspects that they are being followed, but she doesn’t know if it’s a man or an animal. Eventually their stalker strikes. He’s an assassin like Reene, and his target is her. A battle ensues, during which Reene’s hands cramp badly. She’s so overcome by the pain that she’s unable to hold her weapon, and it seems as though her attacker will kill her. At the last moment, the same creatures she met before attack the assassin, and drive him off. Reene collapses from her injuries, and wakes up in a strange house. It sits in a clearing, surrounded by lilies. At the end of the episode, an older woman enters the house, and Reene gets the feeling that she’s met her before.

Episode 21: Where Lilies Bloom
The older woman tells Reene and Hul that her name is Hanah, and that she has lived in this place for several decades. As Hanah tends to Reene’s wounds, Reene struggles to recall where she’s met her before. It comes back to her in a flash: Hanah made several visits to Victor while Reene was still there. Reene immediately withdraws from her, and tells Hul that it’s time for them to leave. Hanah convinces them to stay, and explains several things about herself and Victor. It turns out that she is Victor’s lover, and they’ve been together for nearly 30 years. She explains why Victor chose his job, why he gives his student’s weaknesses, and who the person after Reene is. His name is Chase, and he’s Victor’s latest student. Hanah explains that Victor makes his new students kill his old students, in order to prove that they are good enough, and that’s why Chase is after her. Hanah also tells Chase’s secret: he can’t fight during the day due to an extreme sensitivity to light. With this information, Reene knows that he’ll be back tonight to finish the job, and prepares for the battle.

Episode 22: No Turning Back
The evening comes, and Chase appears, as expected. He and Reene speak for a few minutes, and Reene actually tries to talk him out of doing this, and to leave Victor. Chase explains that he actually sought Victor out, and requested to be trained by him. Reene suddenly hates Chase, and swears to kill him. As the battle continues, Reene’s hands begin to bother her again, and make her vulnerable to Chase. Hul runs over to help her, and together the two of them manage to kill Chase. After the fight, Hanah once again fixes Reene’s wounds. She tells her that they’re not that far from Victor, and tells them how to get there. Finally, she takes Reene off to the side, and asks her a few questions about her hands. Reene doesn’t understand her interest in her hands hurting, she just says that they’ve been sore for years, but they only started interfering with her actions recently. Hanah tells Reene that she suspects that she has Kurin’s disease, and the episode ends.

Episode 23: Regrets
Now that she knows Victor’s exact location, Reene is ready to go and finish her journey. However, Hanah’s warning about Kurin’s disease dominates her thoughts, and she takes one final detour to have herself diagnosed. It’s confirmed: she has Kurin’s disease, specifically the mutation that attacks the arms and hands. It will kill her eventually, but there’s no telling how much time that will take. It could be weeks, months or years. With the news, Reene begins to actually contemplate her death. Ever since her first assassination, she’d always known that she could die, but she never thought that she would die. Now, it was all but certain that she would die before her time. As she contemplates it, she sees Will, of all people. He’s in town making a delivery. The two talk, and for some reason Reene feels a strange urge to confide everything in him, and she does. Hul’s jealousy comes back, but he does his best to control it, for Reene’s sake. With everything that’s happened, Reene begins to have regrets for the first time, and thinks about all the things she wanted to do after she killed Victor: stop roaming aimlessly, take better care of Hul, maybe even start a family. She’s not sure if those things are possible anymore. Will promises her that she will die a happy, old woman, and that he’ll be at her side for the whole time. Reene finally acknowledges her feelings for him, and makes a promise to live as long as she could. But before she could worry about him, a family, or even Kurin’s, there was still one thing she had to do, and that was confront Victor.

Episode 24: Victor
Reene and Hul are on the last stretch of their journey, headed straight for Victor’s house. As they walk, Reene reveals a few more things about her time with Victor, and the things he put her through. Hul knows that this has been her goal for over a year, and that Victor probably deserves to die. But with everything that’s happened on their journey, he wonders if Reene will actually kill him when she finds him. At the end of the episode, they finally reach Victor’s home. There he stands, as if he’d been waiting for her this whole time.

Episode 25: What You Live For
After everything that’s happened on their journey, will Reene go through with her plan and kill Victor? I haven’t given this whole episode a lot of thought, but she does spare him.

Episode 26: Afterthoughts
It’s been five years since the end of their journey, and Hul recounts the events that occurred between then and now in this reunion show of sorts. Reene and Will are married, and have a two year old daughter named Lia, after Jes’ daughter. Reene’s condition has steadily deteriorated, but she lives a relatively happy and healthy life. There are no guns in the house, and the Artemis lies in pieces at the bottom of a river. Even though he knows that Reene will be gone soon, Hul says that they will make the most of their time together, and that’s all that matters.
Sunset
What lies between revenge and redemption?


Episode List
1. On Our Way
2. Reene
3. Suridin
4. The Dogs of War
5. Close Enemies
6. Sitrin
7. Those Left Behind
8. To Arms Once More
9. Operation Sunset
10. Reflections
11. Shattered
12. How We First Met
13. His Mother’s Eyes
14. Second Chances
15. Kurin’s Legacy
16. Beyond the Battle
17. The Battle of Ari-Ko
18. Home Front
19. Saruto
20. Descent
21. Where Lilies Bloom
22. The Truth
23. Regrets
24. Victor
25. What You Live For
26. Afterthoughts

Brief Episode Descriptions

1. On Our Way- Reene and Hul set out on their journey back to Rivelya to find Victor.
2. Reene- This episode explains Reene’s military history prior to joining Special Forces School, but doesn’t go into her family relationship.
3. Suridin- The differences between Rivelya (Reene and Hul’s home country) and Suridin (the country they’re in) are explored in this episode.
4. The Dogs of War- Reene encounters a group of Suridis who want revenge for the war atrocities committed by the Grand Army of Rivelya.
5. Close Enemies- Reene comes across and old comrade from her Special Forces unit. This is the first episode where the conspiracy and Operation Sunset are mentioned.
6. Sitrin- On their way back to Rivelya, Reene and Hul travel through the remains of Sitrin, the town that was destroyed by Reene’s unit a year earlier.
7. Those Left Behind- Reene and Hul find a pair of orphans in Sitrin, and try to find a home for them. This is the first episode where Reene’s strained relationship with her family is mentioned.
8. To Arms Once More- Reene and Hul arrive in the city of Sheeba, only to find the Grand Army’s headquarters to be under siege by a large group of Suridis.
9. Operation Sunset- After the civil unrest, Reene finds herself face to face with Lieutenant General Max, the man who assigned Operation Sunset to Reene’s unit. This is the first episode where Kurin’s disease is specifically mentioned.
10. Reflections- Reene and Hul are on their way out of Sheeba, when a medical officer contacts Reene and asks her to protect his daughter Lia from kidnappers.
11. Shattered- Reene, devastated by the death of Lia, goes on a rampage to make her killer pay.
12. How We First Met- Hul recalls the story of how he and Reene first met a year ago in Sitrin, while Reene learns the true intent of Kurin’s disease.
13. His Mother’s Eyes- Reene and Hul’s relationship has reached the breaking point, and out of nowhere, Hul’s mother reappears to claim him.
14. Second Chances- Reene realizes the truth about Hul’s mother, and sets out to get him back. This episode deals with the time Reene and Hul spent together after the destruction of Sitrin.
15. Kurin’s Legacy- Reene and Hul finally arrive in Rivelya, where they make a startling discovery: Rivelyans have become infected with Kurin’s disease.
16. Beyond the Battle- Reene and Hul come across a settlement of shell-shocked, broken troops who fought in the battle of Ari-Ko.
17. The Battle of Ari-Ko- The actual battle itself is explained. This is the first episode where Reene’s brother is mentioned, and her reasons for joining the Army and Special Forces are explained.
18. Home Front- Reene and Hul begin to reminisce about their families, and the reasons behind the rift between Reene and her parents are explained.
19. Saruto- Reene finally returns home after being away for over seven years. The reason why Rivelyans don’t have last names is also explained.
20. Descent- Reene finds herself in a battle to the death with an enemy that may actually be a better soldier than her.
21. Where Lilies Bloom- Reene is rescued from her battle by Dr. Meldin, the old friend that gave her the special weapon she uses. Dr. Meldin tells Reene the truth about the battle of Ari-Ko, Kurin’s disease, and Operation Sunset.
22. No Turning Back- Reene goes back to finish the duel with the man who attacked her earlier. After the battle, Dr. Meldin gives Reene news that means certain death for her.
23. The Truth- As Reene faces her own mortality, she’s forced to reconcile her true feelings about
her quest to find Victor. Is she seeking redemption, or simply revenge?
24. Victor- This is the episode where Reene finally finds Victor. Everything else that hasn’t been explained about Victor himself, the war and Operation Sunset is explained.
25. What You Live For- Now that she’s found Victor, will Reene actually carry out her goal to kill him?
26. Afterthoughts- Hul re-examines the journey to find Victor five years later, and explains what has happened in the meantime.

Notes for the CX version:
Since I’m not doing an animated series anymore, there doesn’t have to be a seasons’ worth of episodes anymore. This allows me to combine certain episodes together that may not have stood on their own as well. The following episodes will be combined:

Episodes 3 & 4
Episodes 2 & 5
Episodes 6 & 7
Episodes 13 & 14
Episodes 16 & 17 (Episode 15 will most likely be eliminated)
Episodes 18 & 19
Episodes 20 & 21
Episodes 22 & 23
Episodes 24 & 25

This will reduce the series to a new number of issues:
Issue 1: Episode 1
Issue 2: Episodes 2 & 5
Issue 3: Episodes 3 &4
Issue 4: Episodes 6 & 7
Issue 5: Episodes 8 & 9
Issue 6: Episode 10
Issue 7: Episode 11
Issue 8: Episode 12
Issue 9: Episodes 13 & 14
Issue 10: Episodes 16 & 17
Issue 11: Episodes 18 & 19
Issue 12: Episodes 20 & 21
Issue 13: Episodes 22 & 23
Issue 14: Episodes 24 & 25
Issue 15: Episode 26

There may be further consolidation as I look over the series.

As it stands now, here is the series as it will appear in comic book form:
Issue I: On Our Way
Issue 2: Reene
Issue 3: Suridin
Issue 4: Sitrin
Issue 5: Operation Sunset
Issue 6: Reflections
Issue 7: Shattered
Issue 8: How We First Met
Issue 9: His Mother’s Eyes
Issue 10: The Battle of Ari-Ko
Issue 11: Saruto
Issue 12: Descent
Issue 13: The Truth
Issue 14: What You Live For
Issue 15: Afterthoughts
Even though I believe the project greatly improved over the course of those three years, it's still rife with cliches and corniness, like Reene's special gun, the Operation Sunset conspiracy and others that leap out at me as I re-read this. However, I still like Reene as a character, and I think the basic idea has potential. In the next post, I'll start working on how to improve it now that I've become better at both writing and thinking over the last six years.
 
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