A poem by Chillin...

[chillindude829]

ROUND SQUARE

Round, acute, ready to go
Ready to show
Ready to know
Square, obtuse, ready to stay
Ready for today
Ready for pay

A round square

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feedback or whatever. thanks

 

[AndenHellseenkee]

This is a prime example of someone who wastes too much time on the contrabands. ^_^ Lay off chillin. Joking. This is way better than mine. You put me to disgrace in melee and in poem writing.

 

[SNTRL]

I liked it.
i can kind of flow with it like a lil rap. Holla!!:D

Does it have to do with a geometry class or somethin, since all the acute and round square stuff?

 

[Duke]

Oh my gosh, are you kidding me? I totally didn't mean to post and consequently bump a 4 year old topic.

 

[thatsmybutta]

even though it's four years old, i had to say, you wouldnt excpect poetry from someone like chillin dude. hes like 6'4 230 pounds haha

 

[Virgilijus]

In a post of actual feedback:

I liked the first and fourth lines; they were curt yet describe very well what you want. On the other hand, the second, third, fifth, and sixth lines were kind of meaningless to the poem other than lengthening it and contributing to the rhyme scheme. Also, taking away the "for" in the fifth line would add more symmetry to the scheme and in my opinion make it sound better.