I need help.

[½NIÇK½FBM]

I have mixed case of writer's block and constant disaproval of everything I write. Im going to post the only thing I have of my story. Its bad, so I need suggestions on wording, where to go with it, things I could add/take out. Any comments are useful.

This is it:

It had been ten years since we had left Earth, when it seemed like the planet still had a chance. However that chance wasn't good enough for my witty partner and I. We knew Earth wasn't going to make it. We would have gone down with the sorry planet if it wasn't for my friend, who thought maybe we could escape by purchasing a space craft and heading out to the final frontier where we could safely watch the world cave in. It was hard to watch, but it was also an eye opener. It taught us that we couldn't trust our planet, that most people were evil inside, but most of all, it could have been us down there.


Also if this belongs somewhere else could somebody move it? It has to do with WWYP so I put it in here.

 

[Crimson King]

What I would do is two things. First, get a pack of sticky note, and second, outline your story in Roman Numerals/ala typical vertical outline. Once you get the basics, use the sticky notes and create points of the story. Use 3 sticky notes per act, and you should have 9 sticky notes going across. Below each horizontal note, you should have some just fleshing that point out. By the time you are done, your story should be complete.

 

[½NIÇK½FBM]

That sounds like stuff I did in elementary school. But ill give it a go.

 

[Crimson King]

It's done in elementary school because everyone needs visualization.

I actually got this from a writer from ER/Third Watch/Numbers.