So now its my turn...
I have 3 major pieces of advice that should give you exceptional improvment in your game:
1. Watch your opponent first, and yourself second. This is by far the most important rule, and will help you to...
2. Improve your spacing. You missed a marginal amount of easy damage by being simply too far away, or too close. Once you get a better feel on all of your characters moves, this will come more naturally.
3. and for my last bit of advice, don't "force" anything, calm down, and take what they give you, because aggresion is easily punshed.
well, thats all I have to say, everything else is pretty much fine, and remember, when incorporating new things, ease it in, that way it doesn't mess up anything you already know.